Monday Mixer Entry: Canyon Song
“Canyon Song”
Ian poised at the bottom of the chasm, soulful notes pouring forth from his ocarina. He prayed Charity would hear and understand, that the music might stem her regressive behavior.
Hesitating by the rocky rim, Charity cocked her head, listening to the song echoing from the vast space below. The notes swirled and danced, but the tune eluded capture like wisps of smoke. It morphed into an ear splitting, nerve jangling sound that sliced through her.
“Nyaaaackff!” She pawed at the air.
When the scent wafted over, she was on it. Hunger she understood. Lurching from the shadows, she threw herself on the unsuspecting hiker and bit deeply, severing muscle and sinew. The music faded beneath terrified screams and the frenzy of her feeding.
Ian heard the snarls and sighed. “Tomorrow’s another day.”
Charity’s decaying mind sought out the source of the music with the intention of ending it.
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Oh wow. This is a powerful moment, you’ve caught here. Lots of stuff happening “offscreen” that makes me wonder.
I have a love-hate relationship with flash fiction. It’s often hard to capture what I want to say in a set amount of words, and I tend to be a wordy writer, LOL. It is a great way to purge off plot bunnies I don’t have time to invest in at the moment. 🙂 Thanks for reading, Sandi!
Sarah
Great use of small amount of words. Very evocative.
Pssst…check your title! 🙂
Oh, thank you! Glad you enjoyed. Oops… thanks for catching my snafu. :-O
I love the way you not only incorporated ocarina but wove a story around it!! I struggled to use that word and very nearly gave up!! Great job!! 😀
Thanks, Ruth! I found it fascinating, so I had to try it. 🙂
Really draws me in, and makes me crave the backstory! Beautiful!
Oh, thanks, Lisa! Glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
Like Ruth, I thought it was great you wove a story round the Ocarina, and love it’s darker edge! Well done!